As with the earlier emails, I felt this email had too much of him describing himself and describing what he saw in her.Not bad conversations, just happening too early and maybe better to be had in person (depends on who you’re talking to I guess).
Once she responds, I then move into specifics like favorite this or that.I wouldn’t describe myself in first emails to the women.I cover my approach writing first emails with online dating in my post First Contact Email Examples.In that article I also give some examples of how I would write some first emails based on several random dating profiles.I might include some of it in a later email but if it’s really important I would just add it to my profile.
Likewise, I wouldn’t use the first email to describe your impression of whomever you’re contacting.
Also, I’ll be showing examples similar to the emails he sent.
Because I want to avoid revealing any reader’s identity, I’m changing the specifics of his emails.
I’m not going to change the general tone or point of the emails but I am trying to ensure he remains anonymous by changing some of the specifics.
Here is my reader’s first email to a girl who was originally from the same area as him Lonestar State What’s up?
That doesn’t mean always planning out involved activities, but like you said, making anything fun. I like to mix up my going out and relaxing nights at home, and always wanted to go sky diving or hang gliding or something along those lines. Starbucks and the Temple of Doom I think it’s really important to make everyday fun.